As the eclipse began Jackson felt a shiver of terror go down his freezing cold spine.
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Who: Jackson
What: trying to stop our planet getting destroyed
When: the break of dawn
Where: Twilight on hoth
Why: to destroy the Zorgon’s forever
How: cautiously
At the break of dawn, Jackson was trying to stop our planet from getting destroyed on the planet twilight
on hoth cautiously trying to destroy the zorgon’s forever.
on hoth cautiously trying to destroy the zorgon’s forever.
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It was the break of dawn The only sounds I could hear were the crunch of my feet as they penetrated the
layer of snow underneath me, and the faint, hum that came from the orb in front of me. “I really want to
check that out” so I ran back to my snow base and I use my high tech flying snowmobile and zoomed off
to my lab inside the mountain when I got to the lab I asked my robot’s to press the launch button “take
cover!” then I blasted into the dangerous black sky to stop this madness. I was almost and the death star
when I saw two ti fighters heading towards me. I was frozen in fear.
layer of snow underneath me, and the faint, hum that came from the orb in front of me. “I really want to
check that out” so I ran back to my snow base and I use my high tech flying snowmobile and zoomed off
to my lab inside the mountain when I got to the lab I asked my robot’s to press the launch button “take
cover!” then I blasted into the dangerous black sky to stop this madness. I was almost and the death star
when I saw two ti fighters heading towards me. I was frozen in fear.
Great writing, Felix! I felt super cold just reading it!!
ReplyDeleteHi Mum thanks for the comment. I hope you felt cold. Do you like the describing words I used?
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You have used great descrptive words to emphasise the detail in your story & writing - I loved writing too when I was at school! Keep up the great work, Felix, maybe one day you could write a book!
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